Yeah, I would say primarily respond to the latest drafts (there’s a newer one now) but feel free to leave comments on old drafts too. I will read all the comments, but I’ll probably just keep hacking on the latest copy.
These parts don’t make sense. Did something get cut off here?
Those were sort of bullet points alluding to where I would go… so they made sense to me but may not make sense to anyone else. 
The latest draft (v2) is more fully fleshed-out.